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Dead Poets Society - Pherione - 05-24-2011
For all you writers of poetry, artists of the word and literary enchanters,
this thread gives you the occasion to harvest the praise, laud and fame of the crowd
as well as criticize and improve the styles and works of others.
Couple of rules:
- One poem may only be posted once
- please don't quote other people's poems entirely when referring to them cuz that takes a lot of space
- Constructive criticism only please.
The first poem is narrative and tells about a cursed fairy, the second poem deals with the concepts of the awe-struck man, confronted with the sublime.
Quote:The Faerie Knight
And yon rides the Faerie knight
considered fair and gay
and to our gazes he'd excite
presuming to have found his way
for trapped it is onto the moors
in bogs and marshes all alike
trying to set his personal course
end his eternal hike
he dashes forth unto our steps in mud
wonting to be free
but branches strike, scream for his blood
oh how I pity he
and trapped he wanders even still
unto the end of times
and the sounds reach our ears shrill
of those doomsday chimes
Quote:On the multiverse
Once upon a timeGoes the all-old chimeIn eternal space of gods’ embrace.There be the worlds enveloped in their
furious dance.To be lived by life in a mere glance.
And be a witness of the endlessness of
endlessnessSpanning throughout time.Incused by this view sublime
To be unfathomable and unprocurable by
manBe he mortal or immortalLest he cross his limits to rival the
span.And travel ‘till true life’s endThere shedding tears of bliss and awe.
RE: Dead Poets Society - MetalRenard - 05-24-2011
*Screams* CULT!!! *Runs away*
Well, it has to be said, you're very good!
RE: Dead Poets Society - xnadvance - 05-24-2011
Looking Glass
It has said to the reflection which has not wed
brings a portrait that's always matched
and still nothing between them that is attached
day on night off the figures inside never hide
nor do they show what is not that is outside
colors that stand out and ones that don't sit in
things stay the same till that moment came
that one time a branch from the wall smashed through
the hack and slashing noises in seconds dropped like leaf dew
and till then...looking forward became clear.
RE: Dead Poets Society - Pherione - 05-25-2011
Had to read it a couple of times before I got what it was actually about, xnadvance.
Nice poem :)
RE: Dead Poets Society - xnadvance - 05-26-2011
Chariot Wheel
The chariot wheel ran at speeds not known to man
swift as so one couldn't take a glimpse at it until captured
stars danced up in the sky as if they were earthly and raptured
These lights spoke one language and played tunes that infinitely won
against the darkness that surrounded them and who would know when
only to them did time seem clear with visibility while darkness saw negativity
The war of two forces slowed down and the wheel spun the opposite way around
before mortals could find another liveable planet the winning side was already planted
the opposite triumphed over the other that knew and the children of the soil of earth grew
RE: Dead Poets Society - MetalRenard - 06-01-2011
Connotation of a storm is adourned
when thinking of a peril yet unborn
Seen through the minds eye of a man enslaved
by his woeful master, the now depraved.
The true meaning of a storm is not pain
it's beauty unchallenged, power untamed
nature at its worst and best forever,
held deep within my soul as love can never.
RE: Dead Poets Society - LilEvil3000 - 06-01-2011
William Shakespeare was a great author and poet that is dead and gone finally R&J was a good example of his most famous works. ^_^
RE: Dead Poets Society - Mercenary - 06-01-2011
Hitler, Hitler, I've been thinking
What in the world have you been drinking?
Smells like whiskey, tastes like wine,
Oh my gosh, it's iodine.
>Hate poetry
RE: Dead Poets Society - Pherione - 06-06-2011
@ MetalRenard
beautiful poem...if I had to situate it I'd say romanticism
@Mercenary
yours is modernism :p oh the irony ^^
RE: Dead Poets Society - Pherione - 06-08-2011
Wrote this one for a girl, it ain't finished yet. Skipperbirds are an avian species from my fictional universe.
Wings Live
Were you a bird, what would you do?
Soar through the clouds and bend your wings
touching that sea of blue.
Live, fly free
Sing with me nightingale
Imprisoned now, but not for long.
I’ll set you free, I have the key now too
to release you from a cage imprisoned wrong.
Live, fly free
Dance with me lark in the sky
Spread your wings, don’t be afraid.
Sit on my hand and peck my fingers
you stole my heart before
Live, fly free
Love with me skipperbird
Live, fly free