Soulwake - Sword of the Spirit
03-28-2010, 08:33 PM
First of all, make the font size of the storyline much smaller, and black. It's easier to read if you do that.
It might sound harsh, but you wrote the storyline-part in such a "dramatical" way that it made very little sense to me.
I got that some people (I was never told who) is searching the galaxy for some sort of metaphoric weapon called Satan. Satan has been sneezed out of heaven and so was 1/3 of the place. Then it's something about the prince of air. But I don't really understand what he got to do with what I have read. It sounds cool, but it's really really hard to read. I suggest you use dots (.) more frequently and separates the text into paragraphs.
Then it's the characters. Most of them are pretty original. I like the real world mixed with fantasy world twist.
If you can, you should add some graphics related to the characters. I would love to see some charsets or battlers.
That "Fallen" picture is awesome, looks good :)
Your screenshots are cool, Nice light effects on number 1. You are using some charsets that look a bit strange, compared to the RTP charsets that you are also using, but it doesn't really matter. Nice mapping. Great face (Did you make it?) for David.
It might sound harsh, but you wrote the storyline-part in such a "dramatical" way that it made very little sense to me.
I got that some people (I was never told who) is searching the galaxy for some sort of metaphoric weapon called Satan. Satan has been sneezed out of heaven and so was 1/3 of the place. Then it's something about the prince of air. But I don't really understand what he got to do with what I have read. It sounds cool, but it's really really hard to read. I suggest you use dots (.) more frequently and separates the text into paragraphs.
Then it's the characters. Most of them are pretty original. I like the real world mixed with fantasy world twist.
If you can, you should add some graphics related to the characters. I would love to see some charsets or battlers.
That "Fallen" picture is awesome, looks good :)
Your screenshots are cool, Nice light effects on number 1. You are using some charsets that look a bit strange, compared to the RTP charsets that you are also using, but it doesn't really matter. Nice mapping. Great face (Did you make it?) for David.