12-17-2013, 08:32 AM
Echoside : The Shorts
Written by Kain Nobel
What is your opinions and predictions on this excerpt, the characters and the situations presented? Let me know and I'll probably release another piece within the next week or so if you guys enjoyed this one.
Written by Kain Nobel
A *Short* Introduction
A Short Introduction
Okay, so I've been developing the story and overall concept of this project over the past few years, but I've never really posted anything about it. Not that it's a big secret or anything, it's just something I don't mention much. Maybe it just boils down to not really wanting to spoil anything until the whole thing exists, all in one time and space, finally completed in fully playable game form, following with a book deal, a musical, a movie, a Macy's day parade float, etc... (just kidding.)
Today I figure I'll let a little bit of it out... like a wet fart you're saving for your significant other, it hurts to hold it all in for too long ;D
So, from time to time, I'm going to present you all with a sample... OF MY SHORTS :D
Okay, so I've been developing the story and overall concept of this project over the past few years, but I've never really posted anything about it. Not that it's a big secret or anything, it's just something I don't mention much. Maybe it just boils down to not really wanting to spoil anything until the whole thing exists, all in one time and space, finally completed in fully playable game form, following with a book deal, a musical, a movie, a Macy's day parade float, etc... (just kidding.)
Today I figure I'll let a little bit of it out... like a wet fart you're saving for your significant other, it hurts to hold it all in for too long ;D
So, from time to time, I'm going to present you all with a sample... OF MY SHORTS :D
A Request from the Next Mr. President
A Request from the Next Mr. President
Setting : Miran Embassy, East Karcer
Time : Approximately 17:00 hours
* Mack and Alex step into the embassy and are immediately greeted by a doorman followed by 4 uniformed guards in commemorative royal attire which includes some tall, doofy looking furry hats mixed with some fancy bells and frills. Definitely not the field gear that they're used to seeing or wearing. Then again, different countries, different attire.
Door Man : Do you have your Miran Delegates Gold Membership Card?
Alex : Is this some kind of joke? I don't know man, the Governor of Lucian, Mirania has called us here for... whatever reason. Real official envelope, Chimera stamp and all! It said our presence is required by federal law, the General even said it's...
Door Man : Oh! I must see the letter, hand it over please!
* Mack hands over the envelope.
Door Man : Hehe, yes. Right this way.
* Mack and Alex traverse into a swank bedroom with a small writer's table and a queer looking gentleman sitting upon a burgundy chair which appears to be too small for him to even be sitting on.
??? : Good day fellas, Alex and Mack, my name is John Stroker and I am a personal aide for Miran Vice Presidential Nominee Colby J Pentagraham of Ember Way, Electra.
Mack : I don't... think I've heard of... who?
Alex : Wait... didn't he used to be a doctor?
John : Yes, that's him!
Mack : It's too bad that his attempts at time travel ended in bloody failure.
Alex : Remind me why I don't sign up for those "trial experiments". It's too bad he didn't jump into the machine himself.
John : That's why he recruits volunteers, because he's got more important business to attend to! Besides, the man signed a release form, he knew what he was in for. So...
* Alex and Mack exchange odd looks between themselves and VP nominee aid John.
John : Anywho, it seems Ricky Dean is destined to take office, and he personally requested that I get in contact with you two gentlemen. Alex, he seems to be interested in putting you in charge of a private security sector, similar to an O-9 pay grade but with less legal restriction. Mack, he requests you to be his personal aid!
Mack : You forgot to include the M in bitch!
John : E...excuse me?!
Alex : Eh? Maid, bitch, same thing.
Mack : Ricky wants to appoint me to a position where I'm obligated to clean up after or perform his dirty work. Probably down on my knees or on all fours. I get it! I've worked with him for way longer than you've known him.
John : Old war buddies, yeah?
Mack : Buddies? Oh brother...
John : What about you, Alex?
Mack : DON'T. SIGN. ANYTHING. Last time I needed a cavity filled, I went to sign the insurance papers and got a promotion I didn't even knew I signed up for. Really? A military contract mixed into the fine print of a dental forum? Some sneaky jackass that guy is...
John : Alex?
Alex : Wait, what's the pay grade again?
* Mack walks out, slamming the door behind him.
Setting : Miran Embassy, East Karcer
Time : Approximately 17:00 hours
* Mack and Alex step into the embassy and are immediately greeted by a doorman followed by 4 uniformed guards in commemorative royal attire which includes some tall, doofy looking furry hats mixed with some fancy bells and frills. Definitely not the field gear that they're used to seeing or wearing. Then again, different countries, different attire.
Door Man : Do you have your Miran Delegates Gold Membership Card?
Alex : Is this some kind of joke? I don't know man, the Governor of Lucian, Mirania has called us here for... whatever reason. Real official envelope, Chimera stamp and all! It said our presence is required by federal law, the General even said it's...
Door Man : Oh! I must see the letter, hand it over please!
* Mack hands over the envelope.
Door Man : Hehe, yes. Right this way.
* Mack and Alex traverse into a swank bedroom with a small writer's table and a queer looking gentleman sitting upon a burgundy chair which appears to be too small for him to even be sitting on.
??? : Good day fellas, Alex and Mack, my name is John Stroker and I am a personal aide for Miran Vice Presidential Nominee Colby J Pentagraham of Ember Way, Electra.
Mack : I don't... think I've heard of... who?
Alex : Wait... didn't he used to be a doctor?
John : Yes, that's him!
Mack : It's too bad that his attempts at time travel ended in bloody failure.
Alex : Remind me why I don't sign up for those "trial experiments". It's too bad he didn't jump into the machine himself.
John : That's why he recruits volunteers, because he's got more important business to attend to! Besides, the man signed a release form, he knew what he was in for. So...
* Alex and Mack exchange odd looks between themselves and VP nominee aid John.
John : Anywho, it seems Ricky Dean is destined to take office, and he personally requested that I get in contact with you two gentlemen. Alex, he seems to be interested in putting you in charge of a private security sector, similar to an O-9 pay grade but with less legal restriction. Mack, he requests you to be his personal aid!
Mack : You forgot to include the M in bitch!
John : E...excuse me?!
Alex : Eh? Maid, bitch, same thing.
Mack : Ricky wants to appoint me to a position where I'm obligated to clean up after or perform his dirty work. Probably down on my knees or on all fours. I get it! I've worked with him for way longer than you've known him.
John : Old war buddies, yeah?
Mack : Buddies? Oh brother...
John : What about you, Alex?
Mack : DON'T. SIGN. ANYTHING. Last time I needed a cavity filled, I went to sign the insurance papers and got a promotion I didn't even knew I signed up for. Really? A military contract mixed into the fine print of a dental forum? Some sneaky jackass that guy is...
John : Alex?
Alex : Wait, what's the pay grade again?
* Mack walks out, slamming the door behind him.
What is your opinions and predictions on this excerpt, the characters and the situations presented? Let me know and I'll probably release another piece within the next week or so if you guys enjoyed this one.