Memorie

[Someone]

Thought I'd give you a bit of progress. There are some typos and bugs... And I think I am rusty in the writing department.
Well, anyway, here's part of the beginning of the story.

Do you use the advanced message script? It looks like it.  The ?? name boxes are not necessary in some way. i think it would look better without it in the beginning. 
Your map is missing some shadow tiles to give it more depth of the room.   The door tile at the bottom of that one room, you can nearly remove it and just use the sound animation, that would look a bit better i guess.

After all it is a nice Intro :D