10-05-2009, 11:41 PM
Thanks for the support everyone! I usually don't get a response to my poetry topics so I was beginning to wonder if I was doing something horribly wrong. 
Alpha-Mad:
1. I did that to make "my only wish" stand by itself. It's generally supposed to have more emphasis than the rest of that last section. And technically, it shouldn't make a difference because you're not supposed to break in your head after each line in poetry unless there's a comma or other punctuation there. And I don't like rhyming 3x in a row. It just doesn't fit with the rest of the poem, in my opinion.
2. I actually didn't rhyme at all in that poem. It supposed to be random and unstable. Haha that sounds like such an excuse, doesn't it? XD Your suggestion is actually good, but I've grown to like the poem as it is.
Alpha-Mad:
1. I did that to make "my only wish" stand by itself. It's generally supposed to have more emphasis than the rest of that last section. And technically, it shouldn't make a difference because you're not supposed to break in your head after each line in poetry unless there's a comma or other punctuation there. And I don't like rhyming 3x in a row. It just doesn't fit with the rest of the poem, in my opinion.
2. I actually didn't rhyme at all in that poem. It supposed to be random and unstable. Haha that sounds like such an excuse, doesn't it? XD Your suggestion is actually good, but I've grown to like the poem as it is.