02-03-2010, 12:22 AM
This just sounds like the "setting the tone" stuff before the actual plot kicks in, so I'm not sure what to tell you. You get kind of vague towards the end, which makes me think that either:
1) You're not really sure where you want to take the story just yet.
2) You don't want to part with any spoilers.
There's not much to do if it's the former, but if it's the latter please do tell. You don't want to summarize your plot as "Sarah does chores for her lazy grandpa and ends up saving the day." That tells me nothing about the conflict. Is a cat stuck in a tree? Does she have to get the washing in before it starts to rain? Or is reality as we know it being torn asunder and horrific creatures from the abyss are stealing the life energy of our world and we're all going to shrivel up and die? I have no idea which it could be, because you've not given me enough information to go on.
Here's an example of two summaries:
Tidus is a popular Blitzball player living in the advanced city of Zanarkand, but all that is about to change...
A young man named Tidus is transported to the future where he meets a beautiful young summoner named Yuna and goes off with her to try and defeat the abomination known as "SIN" that is ravaging her world.
The second summary provides more information and intrigue, and isn't really spoiling the game. We don't know who lives and who dies, we have no idea what might happen in the end. We don't even know what "SIN" really is. What we do know is that the game has adventure and excitement. So please, share a little bit of your exciting plot if you have it. After all, who wants to play a game where you do chores the whole time? You need to let us know what happens next beyond "stuff happens and you save the day."
I'd be interested to hear it. =)
1) You're not really sure where you want to take the story just yet.
2) You don't want to part with any spoilers.
There's not much to do if it's the former, but if it's the latter please do tell. You don't want to summarize your plot as "Sarah does chores for her lazy grandpa and ends up saving the day." That tells me nothing about the conflict. Is a cat stuck in a tree? Does she have to get the washing in before it starts to rain? Or is reality as we know it being torn asunder and horrific creatures from the abyss are stealing the life energy of our world and we're all going to shrivel up and die? I have no idea which it could be, because you've not given me enough information to go on.
Here's an example of two summaries:
Tidus is a popular Blitzball player living in the advanced city of Zanarkand, but all that is about to change...
A young man named Tidus is transported to the future where he meets a beautiful young summoner named Yuna and goes off with her to try and defeat the abomination known as "SIN" that is ravaging her world.
The second summary provides more information and intrigue, and isn't really spoiling the game. We don't know who lives and who dies, we have no idea what might happen in the end. We don't even know what "SIN" really is. What we do know is that the game has adventure and excitement. So please, share a little bit of your exciting plot if you have it. After all, who wants to play a game where you do chores the whole time? You need to let us know what happens next beyond "stuff happens and you save the day."
I'd be interested to hear it. =)
