Another Untitled story
#5
I added a stronger warning.

(06-08-2015, 01:26 PM)yamina-chan Wrote: I would have wished for a "18+" rating or something of similar kind, before reading.

I see quality in this and in your writing style. I also feel confused, but with a piece set up in a way like this one, that is to be expected.

Thanks for the feedback. It's a piece of a work in progress. So there is no background which would leave any reader confused. I took the piece I like the most because I am hoping to use it in a second project that will have cards or a TCG incorporated somewhere. This story introduces one of the preliminary antagonists and will explain his nature as such.

That is pretty much the only sexual part in the first 3 chapters. I don't want it deemed as erotic but I do want the reader to scratch there their neck/head at little and think a lot on what may happen.
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Another Untitled story - by BeJeremiah - 06-04-2015, 03:23 AM
RE: Another Untitled story - by MetalRenard - 06-04-2015, 04:11 AM
RE: Another Untitled story - by BeJeremiah - 06-04-2015, 04:19 AM
RE: Another Untitled story - by yamina-chan - 06-08-2015, 01:26 PM
RE: Another Untitled story - by BeJeremiah - 06-08-2015, 02:08 PM

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