01-21-2010, 09:52 PM
First things first ... Run your post through a spell checker. Your spelling and grammar aren't horrible or anything, but it just looks more professional when your words are polished. That aside ...
I think your story is very interesting. It has a lot of potential. But I have to wonder if RPG Maker is the best medium for such a story. This seems more along the lines of a point-and-click adventure game or even a first-person action game (doesn't need to be a shooter, but it very well could). It can certainly be done in RM, but another game-making program might be easier. You've only posted the intro, so I can't say much more about the story. What I have read makes me want to keep reading. I hope you're going to explore the theme of diversity and conflict vs compliance and peace.
You haven't posted any graphics, so I can't give you any feedback on that. I will, however, advise you to be very careful with the graphical style you choose. With such a modern and gritty theme, RTP will not set the right atmosphere. You might have trouble finding a great variety of graphical resources, so start practicing your art (even if you suck at it). It'll be far easier than finding a dedicated artist.
I think your story is very interesting. It has a lot of potential. But I have to wonder if RPG Maker is the best medium for such a story. This seems more along the lines of a point-and-click adventure game or even a first-person action game (doesn't need to be a shooter, but it very well could). It can certainly be done in RM, but another game-making program might be easier. You've only posted the intro, so I can't say much more about the story. What I have read makes me want to keep reading. I hope you're going to explore the theme of diversity and conflict vs compliance and peace.
You haven't posted any graphics, so I can't give you any feedback on that. I will, however, advise you to be very careful with the graphical style you choose. With such a modern and gritty theme, RTP will not set the right atmosphere. You might have trouble finding a great variety of graphical resources, so start practicing your art (even if you suck at it). It'll be far easier than finding a dedicated artist.