Mystic Knights Demo 1

[Rose Guardian]

Story :

Many years ago in the world Lola Prince Odayus ruled the continents along with demons called Yokai. Odayus brought pain and suffering the world. So the Elemental Lord created seven Elemental Weapons. They were made from these types of elemental magic that were Water, Wind, Fire, Earth, Light, Shadow, and Spirit. He then found seven warriors to give them to and called them the Elemental Knights. Together with the powers of the elementals they took out Prince Odayus and his army of Yokai.

Over three thousand years have passed since then and the world is in danger once again, because Princess Edmirror now commands the Yokai. Lakes dried up, oceans went haywire, and the weather has gone out of control because of them. When the Elemental Lord noticed this he knew it was time to choose seven new Elemental Knights and bring peace and balance back the world. Little does he know is every thing is about to change.

World Development:

This is the world our heroes live in. Lola is a world filled with many mysteries. It has magic, dragons, gnomes, elves, dwarves, fairies, monsters, and demons. It also once had very beautiful lakes and calm oceans. Many years ago before the Elemental Knights, Lola was condemned in darkness. A man named Cain use to call it his Dark Kingdom. However the creator whose name no one even knows came down and brought light to the world. He trapped Cane in the Underworld for all eternity because of his sins. He then created the Elemental who is the world’s guardian. He used to rule the world to keep its balance and then Prince Odayus took over. After the defeat of Prince Odayus he left the world in the hands of the creator and the people. It is currently being ruled by Princess Edmirror and the Yokai. Now it is overrun with demons, and monsters. Most people who live in the villages are far too scared to leave because of this.

Characters Main:


Randalf
Age: 18
Height: 6’1
Weight: 165lbs.
Race: ?
Element: Shadow
Weapon: Shadow Scythe
Profile: Randalf is the Elemental Knight of Shadow. When he was five years old King Arkis found him outside by a river bank. He then took him in when he found out that his parents were dead and took care of him as if he were his own. King Arkis sent him to and Xion to find the other Elemental Knights. He would jump into danger with out even paying attention and get himself in trouble. He looks for adventure almost all the time. He is loyal to his friends and adopted family. However he seems to hiding something from everyone.



Xion
Age: 21
Weight: 155lbs
Height: 6’
Race: Human
Element: Earth
Weapon: Earth Sword
Profile: Xion is King Arkis’s real son he and Randalf are best friends. He doesn’t seem to like helping his father around the Castle and thinks that he could be too demanding at times. He really hates being bothered and told what to do. Little does he know is that he does actually does a good job when told to do something. He looks to collect gems and picks them up all the time he could find one.


Liabelle
Age: ?
Height: 5’3
Weight: 125lbs.
Race: Elf
Element: Water
Weapon: Water sword
Profile: Liabelle is the elf princess of the Magic Forest. Her parents passed away when she was only a little girl. She has been living in the castle in the forest for a very long time. She likes to go outside and sing. She takes good care of the forest and its fairies. The strange thing is no one actually knows how old she is or how long she has been around.

Characters secondary:


Nixon
Age: 20
Height: 5’10
Weight: 145lbs
Race: Human
Element: Wind
Weapon: Wind Axe
Profile: Nixon is a young man who lives in Limule Village with his grandma. His element wind gives the ability to see things or dream them before they happen. His parents were scared of him because of this so they abandoned him and his grandma took care of him He always knows when something bad is about to happen. However now he keeps his dreams and psychic visions to himself and has only told his grandma about them in fear of not being accepted.


Drake
Age: 26
Height: 6’4
Weight: 168lbs
Race: Human
Element: Fire
Weapon: Fire Swords
Profile: Drake is a man from the farming town Namanda. He has a very hot temper and accidently catches stuff on fire when he get’s mad. Even though he has trouble controlling the element fire he is very soft hearted and kind. A few years ago his older sister fell ill and he has taken care of here since. He hopes to find a cure for her illness while traveling with the main characters.


Max
Age: 22
Height: 6’
Weight: 155lbs
Race: Human
Element: Light
Weapon: Light Sword
Profile: Max is from a very rich family in the Devine City. However unlike most of his family he is not stuck up or obsessed with money and nice stuff. He is actually glad to be leaving the city and help save the world. He sees this as a chance to make a living instead of staying home around nothing but expensive junk.


Alena
Age: 24
Height: 5’5
Weight: 130lbs
Element: Spirit
Weapons: Luna and Sol
Profile: Alena lives in Crepta where many followers of Cain live. She is not one of them though. However her spirit magic is very effective.

Screen Shots my computer won't let me use spoilers for some reason:










Credits:
Scripts

Me's audio encryption

Ccoa's UMS

New Title by Para Dogs

CTB by Charlie Fleed v3.2 - AnimBattlers 13.3 - Release

Graphics:
Title made by Stupidstormy36

Alena's Characterset made by Jose

Dollmages battlers two were recolored by myself

Kylee's Aeris Battler recolored by myself



Faces I made in Face Generator by Celianna I think

Music was made by:

AsceticMonk31
NOTE PLEASE READ: The music in this game is NOT to be USED by anyone except AsceticMonk31 and me.


This is not the final demo the game is still being worked so things might and probably will change later.
I have a mapper helping me with this game he just isn't sure when he will be done touching up the maps.
After he touching things up I will post the new demo of the game with new screen shots. Right now I'm just requesting feed back on this demo.
Demo Not final:

http://www.mediafire.com/?jv92ux229f4z7o...x229f4z7ol
Original post is here. I am Pinky at CA by the way.
http://www.creationasylum.net/forum/inde...opic=27558

[Kristovski]

Haven't tried it yet, but your mapping looks like it could use some work. We have a lot of mappers in the community

[deValdr]

First thing that comes into my mind. The battlers are standing in the air. Get a matching background or put them somewhere it looks natural.

The characters seem a bit cliché. Their life stories seem to have been done before in other games, they are all very young (14 is extremely young) and the unknown age thing is also a bit old. It is like this in very many projects nowadays. I'm not saying you should trash your characters, just add some more originality and remove some of the clichés. :)
My tips:
- Make at least some of the heroes older. How about 40-50-60? The twenties is pretty young, and with no "Wise and experienced" guys they'll have a problem.
- Have less heroes, with as many as seven heroes it is hard to make all of them interesting, and they may end up being personality-less. Start out making the, how about four most important characters. Give them lots of features and personality traits. Then make the less important ones later. After all, these require less detail ;)


The story seems kinda cool. But it might need some rewriting. (Not the storyline, but the summary in your post). Make it a bit more catchy and action packed.
Awesome title screen mate, your windowskin too ;D

Your mapping could need some improvement. When making forests, use lots of time. Use all the different flowers, mushrooms, stones, etc. and use it all over. Just make sure it look asymmetric.
For the inside mapping, like that castle screenshot. Make the room smaller, place the walls closer to the middle. Smaller rooms look better and are easier to map. Avoiding making the room a square is also a good idea.
The stairs mark a higher part of the floor, but the floor on the sides of the stairs goes the same. Put some walls there or something.

This looks promising, it just needs some work ;)

[Rose Guardian]

Thank you. I have a mapper by the way. He is touching up the maps I made and is also fixing a few other things he just doesn't know when he'll be done. When he is done I will post the new improved demo. Also there is an original side to Randalf that comes out later and then explained in Mystic Knights 2: The Elemental Stones which will be made after this one is touched up and done. I actually wrote this as a story before I made the game. I kept finding myself having to shorten it. So I decided to chop the game up into three games, Mystic Knights, Mystic Knights 2: The Elemental Stones and Mystic Knights 3: Journey through the ages. Also I need seven characters because of the story. I do understand what you're saying though.

[deValdr]

You should list some as main and some as secondary then. In addition to what I said in my earlier post, too many characters scare away people.

[Rose Guardian]

Okay I list some as secondary then.

[computerwizoo7]

yo ^^
i think you should request a new title screen graphic for your project...
i can make ya one, but u have to use the form ^^

anyway, other than ur 1990 looking and rtp graphics... i dont see anything wrong with ur project.

[deValdr]

I don't see why he would need a new one, he's current one is just fine.

[Rose Guardian]

I don't want a different title screen I like the one Stupidstormy36 made for me. It's what I wanted.

[computerwizoo7]

hmm... i see ^^