The Untold Story: Fighting for a New World

[BeJeremiah]

I enjoyed the demo, I have included my impressions in the spoiler so as not to reveal you plot and such.


My Impressions...

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In the opening sequence, images would speak loader than words and I like how you draw. There's innocent quality to it and for goodness sake you use realistic body types - thank you. I just wish there was more of it instead of the black screen with text.

In the part after Aden puts on the ring... there does not seem to be much effect to it. As to say, Aden states the next morning he could not stop thinking about the ring... and the thought comes to mind why and how? Sleep occurrence was a few second. This was a good place for some black screen and some text even just a suspensful sound effect instead of the normal sleep sound. Something forbidding to give a glimpse into what the ring does exactly or how its affecting Aden's mind without revealing too much.

A little more handholding in the early, unless i did everything. Got a point were I was wandering trying to steal the old fisherman boat.

Overall, still enjoyed what you have so far.

[TsunamiJurai]

Thank you for your feeback. Some of the stuff that you have said im trying to work on them. SO here is a few things im working on or fixed. Contains Spoilers.

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1# It now has a book background, just working on some pictures for it like in Zelda.
2# Im working on the scene with Aden and the Ring. So far he has to get the key from his sister when she is sleeping. When he puts it on he will do abit of screaming and the player get a glimpse of demon form (but it be flashed white) and pass out. I will deifiently use that idea with creepy music and maybe some fast images.
3# The boat was... at the beginning stages of game but left it out. Guess I should make him say something else.
4# I fixed the "transition" at beginning with Ellen with a black picture so it doesnt show her lol...

So the how was the part when Sopia joined and so. What about after that? Did it get more interesting?

And Metal. Its not a problem. Im working on some things to make it better.

[BeJeremiah]

Thank you for your feeback. Some of the stuff that you have said im trying to work on them. SO here is a few things im working on or fixed. Contains Spoilers.

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1# It now has a book background, just working on some pictures for it like in Zelda.
2# Im working on the scene with Aden and the Ring. So far he has to get the key from his sister when she is sleeping. When he puts it on he will do abit of screaming and the player get a glimpse of demon form (but it be flashed white) and pass out. I will deifiently use that idea with creepy music and maybe some fast images.
3# The boat was... at the beginning stages of game but left it out. Guess I should make him say something else.
4# I fixed the "transition" at beginning with Ellen with a black picture so it doesnt show her lol...

So the how was the part when Sopia joined and so. What about after that? Did it get more interesting?

I have not gotten that far yet.

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I was standing near ellen and aden's home for a while trying to steal the guys boat. Once I realized i could exist the city south i killed stuff for a little while then realized i could across the bridge there with my new party member. I am currently in a cave with black monsters fighting a blob that killed me. Ill go back and try to find Sopia, I don't remember an option to get her.

So far, I would say it has a good foundation. Game play is nice, story is good (has your basic rpg elements), but I will have to get farther to really give a strong this is amazing reaction with the meat and potatoes annnnnnd dessert. That moment of wow... I was not expecting that or OMG did that just happen... im waiting for it with anticipation.

[TsunamiJurai]

Thank you for your feeback. Some of the stuff that you have said im trying to work on them. SO here is a few things im working on or fixed. Contains Spoilers.

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1# It now has a book background, just working on some pictures for it like in Zelda.
2# Im working on the scene with Aden and the Ring. So far he has to get the key from his sister when she is sleeping. When he puts it on he will do abit of screaming and the player get a glimpse of demon form (but it be flashed white) and pass out. I will deifiently use that idea with creepy music and maybe some fast images.
3# The boat was... at the beginning stages of game but left it out. Guess I should make him say something else.
4# I fixed the "transition" at beginning with Ellen with a black picture so it doesnt show her lol...

So the how was the part when Sopia joined and so. What about after that? Did it get more interesting?

I have not gotten that far yet.

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I was standing near ellen and aden's home for a while trying to steal the guys boat. Once I realized i could exist the city south i killed stuff for a little while then realized i could across the bridge there with my new party member. I am currently in a cave with black monsters fighting a blob that killed me. Ill go back and try to find Sopia, I don't remember an option to get her.

So far, I would say it has a good foundation. Game play is nice, story is good (has your basic rpg elements), but I will have to get farther to really give a strong this is amazing reaction with the meat and potatoes annnnnnd dessert. That moment of wow... I was not expecting that or OMG did that just happen... im waiting for it with anticipation.

Thennn. Just get through the cave (dont worry about Sopia she will come, for now its you and Valerie.) and contiune. You might get your wow.. And dont forget any skills that can be learned. So check your bag or buy some at Library if you haven't. It will ease up on fighting abit. Also there are currently 4 hidden caves with goodies. Everyone likes free stuff.

[TsunamiJurai]

Sorry for double posting but here are two voiced skills from Sopia. Sorry it took some time to fill up Overdrive bar. And a tiger with a spear?   Thats new lol. Also some reason when Sopia uses Heal the Weapon shows but not on her custom skills even if I wrote it like in the Bow add-on script. Also planning when she heals someone she will say something different depending on the person. 

[DerVVulfman]

Doubleposting is only if it's within mere minutes or mebby an hour, and only if there isn't anything new and pertinent to share.

This isn't doubleposting by our standards in the least.

[MetalRenard]

It's nice that you want to add voices like that, definitely makes the game more interesting. Just, as an audio specialist, the voices are really badly recorded and there's even some distortion due to the input being too high.

Have you considered asking on Newgrounds, by the way? There are lots of voice actors on there who might me interested.

[TsunamiJurai]

@Metal -   to me it sounded OK and yes some recordings have interference. The recording was so low i had to raise the volume. Awww. Hope it isn't so bad to make your ears bleed. I don't want that in my game. I never really heard of newgrounds. Only this one time where my brother showed me some videos there.

Also I have a favor if you could do this. I want to add an opening(like in anime) so I need a song of some kind. Something like this maybe

@DerWulfman - Ah ok good to know! I don't wanna break any rules here.  

[MetalRenard]

I have a range of songs with vocals but none that fit that precise style, mine tend to be heavier. I do go by the name "METAL"Renard, yknow. :P Plus it depends, do you plan on making this a commercial project? If so then we'd need to make an arrangement, otherwise, just for fun, I guess I could let you use something.

Otherwise if you don't think you need vocals there's a wider choice.
With vocals I was thinking this one (any part of the song might fit):
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NWrjYi371oM&l

Without vocals:
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/726902

Close or something completely different?

[TsunamiJurai]

@Metal - I have listened to almost all your videos    Watched revelation a few times trying to get a few ideas. I think it could work. No ideas how other people will feel about a metal opening XD But the words pack a punch. Alot of meaning. I think it fits with the idea of the game.

I wanted the game to be free for everyone since im using alot of scripts and plus for my father. The other thing I could offer is to design a Fox man for you and make a speedpaint video.  

Well I just created a newgrounds account so I will see what I can do there.